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jayboat
Banned
period after 'he threw it in the pot'
no apostrophe in Latinos
impactful instead of impacting (both are awkward)
only one 'never forget' in the Rodney King sentence
waaay too many commas- after hitters, characters
middle Eastern
period after week
reminding 'who' or 'what' of Rodney's scene?
Born instead of Borne
Daniel's (needs possessive)
no comma after feeling
no comma after housewife
carjacking is one word
Bridges... change the structure of this sentence- dangling participle
cast were not where
Mr. (no apostrophe) Haggis
deserve not disserve
D- :ack2:
no apostrophe in Latinos
impactful instead of impacting (both are awkward)
only one 'never forget' in the Rodney King sentence
waaay too many commas- after hitters, characters
middle Eastern
period after week
reminding 'who' or 'what' of Rodney's scene?
Born instead of Borne
Daniel's (needs possessive)
no comma after feeling
no comma after housewife
carjacking is one word
Bridges... change the structure of this sentence- dangling participle
cast were not where
Mr. (no apostrophe) Haggis
deserve not disserve
D- :ack2:
Perlmudder
New member
second sentence of page two last paragraph you are missing the s in has. fix the page numbers.
DonziGirl
Founding Member
"CRASH, unfortunately the title is rather fitting. " is an incomplete sentance and awkward. If you use it, maybe put in a semi-colon instead of a colon.
"of way to many characters, " - to should be too
"thru" should be threw
Cash is right - Middle Eastern should be capitalized.
"Latino’s, " should not have an apostrophe - it isn't a possessive
"Truly a shame as this premise for the film has some real potential to make an impacting social statement" What premise? I think it should be "the premise".
I can keep going if you want. That's just what I found in the first paragraph.
"of way to many characters, " - to should be too
"thru" should be threw
Cash is right - Middle Eastern should be capitalized.
"Latino’s, " should not have an apostrophe - it isn't a possessive
"Truly a shame as this premise for the film has some real potential to make an impacting social statement" What premise? I think it should be "the premise".
I can keep going if you want. That's just what I found in the first paragraph.
Ratickle
Founding Member / Super Moderator
And I thought it was because you were busy thinking up candidates for POTW.
Ratickle
Founding Member / Super Moderator
No sh_t, I'm going back to school just so I can ace a PHD.
Ratickle
Founding Member / Super Moderator
Cash Bar
Charter Member
I thought you were a Democrat Photographer, not a damn English teacher.
Under the OBAMA Plan he can do both and still make more than all of us. :sifone:
jayboat
Banned
Yeah, riiiight.
The only way that happens is if I start printing my own money.
Who wants a sack of Benjamins?
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